05-17-2006, 05:25 PM
Olibu:
Eh, it was okay. The huge paragraphs threw me off and I skimmed the fighting. Sorry.
Kid Buu:
I'm normally all for randomness, but that was just stupid. I didn't follow a damn thing that happened. I hope that's not how you usually write.
Nezi:
Good description, but that's pretty much all it was. Description.
13:
I liked it. Had enough description to give me a picture of the scene, enough character for me to know relate to 13's actions, and enough humor to amuse me.
The ending like, with Puukin, was gold
Eh, it was okay. The huge paragraphs threw me off and I skimmed the fighting. Sorry.
Kid Buu:
I'm normally all for randomness, but that was just stupid. I didn't follow a damn thing that happened. I hope that's not how you usually write.
Nezi:
Good description, but that's pretty much all it was. Description.
13:
I liked it. Had enough description to give me a picture of the scene, enough character for me to know relate to 13's actions, and enough humor to amuse me.
The ending like, with Puukin, was gold