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[Hellfighter 17]

There are some minor grammatical errors that I can bypass, but there is, like, no description and no flow, you just jump from one thing to another. Try adding in some description, like making


"Well, whats the problem ?" Asked Uub getting ready for a sneak attack


(as a note, 'asked' should not be capitalized, since it is in direct correlation with the speech and not a new sentence of itself. 'Whats' should be 'what's,' since it is a contraction for 'waht is.' And there should be no space between 'problem' and the question mark)


"Well," began the human, eyeing the intruder, "what's the problem?" he questioned, moving his feet slightly, strategizing them to wait for an opportune time of striking his target before he even knew what wa shappening.


Also, try coming up with some pronouns to replace 'Uub,' such as 'warrior,' 'human,' 'mohawk man," and so forth. Re-write it or write a new one with these in mind, please.