the scent of light

[Vegeta]

Originally posted by Android-18
It had good imagery, to form images in someones mind, by your choice of words. You used words to invoke the 5 senses. My only problem is I'm not a fan of long things, and after a while the effect of the poem felt less great. Of course, I feel like shit now so maybe that's just me.

It's a good style.

thanks a bunch. i know it's long, i don't know if you've read any of my other works but they are not usually this long. this is probably the longest thing i've written and a while, and plus it's spaced out to be long. but if that's your only problem, then awesome.

thanks again for the feedback.