06-01-2006, 08:23 PM
You're getting there. You need to go over your grammer though. Your sentence structure is a little off, such as:
It was inevitable upon look on both fighters. That neither would stand down,
Should just be:
It was unmistakeable by the look on both fighters, that neither would stand down.
See how the second just flows alot better?
Try and revise that last post and see if you can get it into shape.
It was inevitable upon look on both fighters. That neither would stand down,
Should just be:
It was unmistakeable by the look on both fighters, that neither would stand down.
See how the second just flows alot better?
Try and revise that last post and see if you can get it into shape.
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