11-23-2005, 06:51 PM
To SB:
Luckily, I already read yours a couple days ago (I was intrigued at what you would do with SB, as there haven't been too many--good--histories out there).
I'll start with your overall rating: a 7.25, my good sir.
I enjoyed the storyline, it was really enticing; you drew me in from the beginning, having me become curious as to just what Super Buu was. I love that you defined him in your own way, really personifying him unlike the show did where he was just created an dthen set out on planets. That's essentially what this SB was made for, but there seems to be much more to it than that.
You portrayed Bibidi's logs very nicely; the way he went it seemed as though Bibidi was getting caught up in the glory of his experiemnt. I really wish you had described Super Buu's voice a bit more, 'cause I had a hard time imagining what he talked like (I know he talked in the show, but the usage of words and how easily he put sentences together in your RPs says that he doesn't speak that way here). There are some minor grammatical mistakes, and you could have definitely made it better by delving more deeply into how SB felt about all of it, but it was still pretty darn good; nice job.
Me? I mainly chose this one because I had a hard time trying to create how things 'were.'
Luckily, I already read yours a couple days ago (I was intrigued at what you would do with SB, as there haven't been too many--good--histories out there).
I'll start with your overall rating: a 7.25, my good sir.
I enjoyed the storyline, it was really enticing; you drew me in from the beginning, having me become curious as to just what Super Buu was. I love that you defined him in your own way, really personifying him unlike the show did where he was just created an dthen set out on planets. That's essentially what this SB was made for, but there seems to be much more to it than that.
You portrayed Bibidi's logs very nicely; the way he went it seemed as though Bibidi was getting caught up in the glory of his experiemnt. I really wish you had described Super Buu's voice a bit more, 'cause I had a hard time imagining what he talked like (I know he talked in the show, but the usage of words and how easily he put sentences together in your RPs says that he doesn't speak that way here). There are some minor grammatical mistakes, and you could have definitely made it better by delving more deeply into how SB felt about all of it, but it was still pretty darn good; nice job.
Me? I mainly chose this one because I had a hard time trying to create how things 'were.'
"We're just two lost souls swimming in a fish bowl."
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