Rate the Roleplay Above You

[Alexander Trafford]

I've been drawn to your RP's for some time now, they have sort of an addicting taste to them. I Love how you paint a picture, using vivid descriptions and good word choice to illustrate your point. I also love how you tie in many charachters, INcluding the brief with Stu, i hope their is more of a point to him in later RP's, because if his only point was him going past Bojack on the way out, you may have gone overboard with his section of the RP. I also enjoy how you incorporate how others would percieve Bojack.

Originally posted by Bojack
Bermann sighed, raspberry smoke drifting from his lips. His ears perked suddenly, as if noticing something different about the air. Then, suddenly, as if from nowhere at all: ?Bermann.?

A voice? Was he going mad? Was the cigar laced with PCP? Had Jesus come? Either way disembodied voices couldn?t be too good, he decided, and ignored it. Still though, there was something familiar in that voice.


?Bermann.? With that the Ader flickered into plain view within the little shop.

I loved this, i Thought it was fantastic. You build up a unimportant charachter briefly and show how an ordinary person would percieve Bojack, and you give him a personality, something the reader can reflect upon and relate to.

If i have one problem about your writing, and only a little in this RP, whenever you refer to Bojack it is always 'Ader' nothing else. Except when Bermann calls him the Blue Devil. But that's just a pet peeve of mine. OVerall Fantastic 8.5/10.

Anything in here is recent, the last one is preferable.