My lyrics

[Abel]

Average.

and I kicked his ass real quick
I left him in a pit

Ew. Don't ever use the rhyme scheme, that flow, and that bar, ever again. I hate seeing a small line right after another one for the bar, it makes it not flow well at all. I really hope your black. But the start was very nice with the powerful words.

I break niggas into fractions
and I blame you for my actions

And it would have sounded better if you had one more rhyme coming from it. Do something like this:

I break niggas into fractions
and I blame you for my actions
but that's just my reaction/
I remove you like subtraction/
when shit gets hectic
etc etc.

I don't like seeing just one bar rhyme suck as

I break niggas into fractions
and I blame you for my actions

and then going to another bar with different rhymes. That's just me.

You got critiqued by Wildfire Productions, which is me.

Wildfire Productions

And yes, that is me, and I'm fourteen.