01-05-2007, 01:23 AM
Your IP doesn't match, so that's fine.
Your RP could use work. Do you have Microsoft Word? If you used that it'll help correct some of your errors.
Your dialogue is good, you just have some spelling errors, and grammical errors (lol don't we all?). If you could, either use Word and redo your roleplay, or try to fix it up yourself. I know some mistakes are simply from typos
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You seem to have very good potential, though, I just want to see if you can fix up your RP.
Your RP could use work. Do you have Microsoft Word? If you used that it'll help correct some of your errors.
Your dialogue is good, you just have some spelling errors, and grammical errors (lol don't we all?). If you could, either use Word and redo your roleplay, or try to fix it up yourself. I know some mistakes are simply from typos
. You seem to have very good potential, though, I just want to see if you can fix up your RP.
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