Burter Advice

[Burter]

@Eighteen:

Okay, uh, here goes. Your writing is solid and always has been. Like I said to you, last year you weren't eliminating for roleplaying bad, you were eliminated for not writing as good as the survivors of your fight. That's not saying much because Rad and Bardock were both fantastic, so you getting eliminated and still injuring Bardock says a lot

Anyway, onto advice. Like Raditzu, you're too predictable, and predictable is boring. I know you're gonna wanna team up with Rad, develop your relationship there and all that fun stuff. Which is cool, if I haven't already read that same scene 50 times before. I won't feel a drive to keep someone in if I already know what's going to happen with them.

So you need to change things up. Different actions, different partner maybe, different relationship with Rad. Just something needs to change so I can't say "Well, I'm sick of reading about this."

If you don't take my advice, you'll probably die with Raditzu around Top 25-30. If you do, you stand a good chance of outlasting him (and thus giving Eighteen even more development) and hitting the Top 10, or better.