09-23-2007, 02:51 PM
Your writing is alright, however you need to be more varient in the usage of words when it comes to the character. Constantly saying "the Demon" and "Vegeta Jr." is repetitive and makes the RP rather boring.
Currently Vegeta Jr is now avilable. This list should be up to day (except for Nappa, he is being applied for): http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=108 if someone you want isn't on there feel free to ask.
Currently Vegeta Jr is now avilable. This list should be up to day (except for Nappa, he is being applied for): http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/forumdisplay.php?f=108 if someone you want isn't on there feel free to ask.
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