CnC game

[Minoshia]

classy introduction post i'd say. Really good detail in your writing, i could picture exactly what your describing down to the dime. Also i liked how you implemented how Violet was feeling about the situation, but you were blatant , ie "violet was feeling alone and vulnerable". you worked everything together very nicely to create a fluid post that i enjoyed reading, i'll be following your character throughout this entire thing. im very interested to see how this thing with bardock turns out and i thought it was a good idea to get him into this post a little, also showing how she was feeling.

Excellent introduction post, keep up the detail.

mine
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post459467