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[Minoshia]

You have a very unique way of totally enticing the reader. Your Rp's are incredibly well written, as you probably no, i see little or no language flaws. And the material is interesting in an odd way. I found myself chuckling at the imagery you presented of HF17, you do a very good job at painting a picture for the reader and grabbing the attention of the reader. I know it was a short roleplay, but next time maybe you could add a bit more substance in it though? I'd give you an A- for that piece based on launguage and quality of the writing, but if i was basing it on keeping you in the game or not - i dont know if you presented enough to get someone interested in where you were taking this characther, but im sure you will do that in future RP's. nice work man.

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