06-03-2008, 01:30 AM
Hmmm... didn't Minoshia do something simliar to this last year? Eating raw flesh?
It was okay, but wasnt exciting. I ahvent been reading anyone elses posts, but im guessing you have a storylne going on with the last part of the text, perhaps thats what you should hit on next time to further entice the readers.
Just my opinion. Other then that and the constant attempt to use 'big' words, I dont ahve a problem with it. and think it was alright and decent. Bland but decent.
Mine: http://cdbzrpg.com/forum/showpost.php?p=...stcount=39
I already know I made grammar and typo's... so unless it looks like im doing someing really gramitical Iwrong, as in I have the wrong Idea I dont want to vhear it, I guess I want the kind of CnC... of how I can actually...BETTER my Rping skill
It was okay, but wasnt exciting. I ahvent been reading anyone elses posts, but im guessing you have a storylne going on with the last part of the text, perhaps thats what you should hit on next time to further entice the readers.
Just my opinion. Other then that and the constant attempt to use 'big' words, I dont ahve a problem with it. and think it was alright and decent. Bland but decent.
Mine: http://cdbzrpg.com/forum/showpost.php?p=...stcount=39
I already know I made grammar and typo's... so unless it looks like im doing someing really gramitical Iwrong, as in I have the wrong Idea I dont want to vhear it, I guess I want the kind of CnC... of how I can actually...BETTER my Rping skill
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