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[Zangya]

A very good post, Bujin.

I liked the general feel of it, and Bujin's personality was portrayed very well in your narration. I felt that the wording of it was good, and that the vocabulary was balanced quite well between impressive and common; but of course, using common language every once in a while is, in itself, impressive. Don't want too many big words, after all.

I liked the content of the post, as well. I thought that it played very well into Bujin's goals, though I have to admit, I thought that as someone who has almost forgotten what I read of your work on Day One Early Morning, it was unclear whether Bujin was itching for a fight or cautious, hoping not to get into one. That was influenced by this statement:

Off in the distance, a shadow loomed on the horizon. He gripped the leach, preparing to do…whatever he was going to do if he met another competitor. The shadow grew closer, its advance menacing. However, the new sunlight divided the shadow, revealing a harmless deer. Bujin breathed a sigh of relief – possible death was going to have to wait.

The bolded parts sort of contradict each other. It'd be better if you clarified. Otherwise, a good post.

Overall: 9.5/10; Grade: A

So, I can't decide, so I'm going to let people decide between my Afternoon post and my Morning post.