Rate the Roleplay Above You

[Kaden]

So, I didn't look at where that post was when I first clicked the link, which made the beginning of your post a little confusing. Once I caught on to the whole Dojo thing, it made a lot more sense. Anyway, on to the actual rating.

That RP is what I would refer to as "fluff." Nothing happens in it. In fact, you spent 6 (estimating because of your chosen format) paragraphs to say "Krillin walked halfway down the hallway." Obviously there's room for exprapolation in your next post, but I'm not rating the one. I'm assuming that, for the most part, you're RPing the application process on your own. So having something so fluffy isn't that major a drawback since no one is relying on you for character progression. Its just lame as a reader to read through something then, at the end, stop and say "wait... nothing actually happened."

Or at least it would have been with anyone else. Seriously, the humor in your posts never fails to amaze me. Its always entertaining, doesn't feel forced and is never too over the top for your character that it breaks the writing. Trying to conjure a mental image of the Serphim standing there watching Krillin do pull-ups from a chandelier would make anyone grin. I know I did. Even without the humor, you add so much flavor to seemingly mundane passages (ie. the bit about the clumsy mantra) that you turn whatever you want into a plot device. As far as writing actually goes that's genius.

And, of course, who doesn't love capes?

7/10

EDIT:

Errr... right. My post.

http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...age=3&sid=

I really just wanted to post what I thought about Krillin's. I spaced the fact that I was supposed to post an RP of my own. Aaaaanyway, the most recent post by yours truely in the linked thread will be fine.