Rate the Roleplay Above You

[CoolSpice]

Yeah. Sorry about that, don't know what I was thinking (not much).

Well to Raditzu:

Personaly I liked it. I found that your ability to RP a fight scene is very, very good. I also enjoyed some of your vocabulary.

When they returned to hers, they were full of such sincerity that she forgot they had been beating the proverbial shit out of each other just seconds ago.

Another thing I enjoyed was the fact that you didn't over use one certain way of addressing a character before moving on to another.

With a sudden surge of determination, 18?s arms broke free of her captor and swung forward violently. Instinctively, Raditzu jerked backwards and pushed himself away from his lover. Too slow. Even he couldn?t completely avoid the sudden assault. Small pieces of flesh dangled from the woman?s finger nails and blood ran freely from the saiyan?s right cheek. Without even thinking about it, the pure-blooded warrior?s tongue snaked across the wound, lapping at the blood, momentarily, with a sadistic grin. When he had finished the small display he spoke:

Instead of:

With a sudden surge of determination, 18?s arms broke free of Raditzu and swung forward violently. Instinctively, Raditzu jerked backwards and pushed himself away from his lover. Too slow. Even Raditzu couldn?t completely avoid the sudden assault. Small pieces of flesh dangled from the woman?s finger nails and blood ran freely from Raditzu's right cheek. Without even thinking about it, Raditzu's tongue snaked across the wound, lapping at the blood, momentarily, with a sadistic grin. When Raditzu had finished the small display he spoke:

I may be over exaggerating a bit, but it gets my point across.

I didn''t notice any gramatical errors, no spelling errors, it was very well writen, and just good all around in my opinion.

(I would have taken a bit longer on this, but i'm going somewhere soon I don't want to keep anyone waiting.)