07-25-2006, 06:12 PM
Well im a poor judge of RPs. That is why I have trouble finding any possible flaws. Oh sure, you could have added this or that, but it would be more of a suggestion then a correction. Its also possible you already added such things before which preety much negates the point.
Sensless bablling aside, I really think you poured at least a bit of your soul into this one. Its quite deep. It is also noticable that the break did you good as it is detailed in many ways unlike usual posts which detail a few aspects and totally neglect others.
I know you were probably hoping for expert critique rather then pointless praise. But like I said, I am a poor judge of RPs and sadly I am unable to point out any ways you could improve your writing. Beacuse to me that RP is simply excellent.
Keep up the good work.
Sensless bablling aside, I really think you poured at least a bit of your soul into this one. Its quite deep. It is also noticable that the break did you good as it is detailed in many ways unlike usual posts which detail a few aspects and totally neglect others.
I know you were probably hoping for expert critique rather then pointless praise. But like I said, I am a poor judge of RPs and sadly I am unable to point out any ways you could improve your writing. Beacuse to me that RP is simply excellent.
Keep up the good work.
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