I beg of you

[Ruhiel]

I believe this may be the first time (possibly second) that I have ever asked for comments or criticism in my stay here on Chubbs, but this time I really need it. For those who haven't read anything I've been writing (probably most people), I've been attempting to put together a rather large writing compilation of both sides of my character, plus an objective third person view of both sides as well. Those are known as "The Diary of a Machine," All of my regular posts up to DA '06, and a soon-to-be-written storyline that details my character watching himself and observing (due to the fact of his past self having traveled to the future thanks to the Pendulum Room).

So, what I'm asking of you all is this:

Please, just give me some feedback. Any kind of feedback. I've tried out so many different styles throughout all these works, and I think I finally found the one I liked best with my most recent post in "PR: The Pendulum Theory."

To be precise, I'd really like any kind of feedback on these two parallel storylines:

Diary of a Machine (Android 20's Perspective)
PR: The Pendulum Theory (Gero's Perspective)

Please, I'd appreciate any kind of comments. I need to know how I'm doing somehow.