I beg of you

[Jack]

Originally posted by Recoome

For some strange reason, he had expected it to be more elaborate or ornate than it was. In fact, he had expected there to at least have been some form of lighting in the room.

When you say expected twice in a row, it sounds awkward. I know it has a technichal name, but I don't know it. I just know that I don't like it, and that a different word could have been used instead. Though, as my "School Project" rp shows, I too have that problem.

I disagree. He was stressing the point by reiterating. Maybe italicizing 'some' or 'least', or maybe even 'expected' itself would have made a better effect though.

I will read it and tell you what I think... may take a couple of days though.