09-19-2006, 03:35 AM
Zach, thats some good stuff. You have really developed Minoshia into this brooding, malevolent anti-hero. I cant help but cream at the possibilities you would have if that Goku Jr from your early days here was still in continuity. He would probably be a goody-good, and you this Dabura disciple, it would be great.
Ripping out hearts is a deffinent plus. I want more of that. It was great how you added an epic tone to it and didnt just pass it off as some minimal act of violence. You stuck your arm into a living chest and removed a beating organ... thats devilish. You wrote it as such, and with that act, you have solidified Minoshia into the best villain on Chubbs (IMO).
Please?
Was the diction good? Confusing? Did it flow well? And especially, what did you think of Bidos 'story'?
Ripping out hearts is a deffinent plus. I want more of that. It was great how you added an epic tone to it and didnt just pass it off as some minimal act of violence. You stuck your arm into a living chest and removed a beating organ... thats devilish. You wrote it as such, and with that act, you have solidified Minoshia into the best villain on Chubbs (IMO).
Please?
Was the diction good? Confusing? Did it flow well? And especially, what did you think of Bidos 'story'?
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