09-21-2006, 05:38 AM
KV, it felt as though you were trying too hard to make a good post. I don't know if that's just your natural style or what, but the description was definitely over-the-top. I know I have a stylistic preference much different than most, but if the only glimpse we get of you individuality as a writer has to be seen between the bars of tedious description, than we don't really get a feel for you. What's more, the reader might get bored.
That said, your description is phenomenal. I think, however, instead of using it to the degree that you do, you should instead select only a few details that convey the scene you're trying to create, and leave the reader to imagine the rest.
But, again, that's just me. I tend to use very little description as it is. =p
http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...post272984
That said, your description is phenomenal. I think, however, instead of using it to the degree that you do, you should instead select only a few details that convey the scene you're trying to create, and leave the reader to imagine the rest.
But, again, that's just me. I tend to use very little description as it is. =p
http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...post272984
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