PCIII Official C&C

[Veritas]

Originally posted by Krillin
KV, it felt as though you were trying too hard to make a good post. I don't know if that's just your natural style or what, but the description was definitely over-the-top. I know I have a stylistic preference much different than most, but if the only glimpse we get of you individuality as a writer has to be seen between the bars of tedious description, than we don't really get a feel for you. What's more, the reader might get bored.

That said, your description is phenomenal. I think, however, instead of using it to the degree that you do, you should instead select only a few details that convey the scene you're trying to create, and leave the reader to imagine the rest.

But, again, that's just me. I tend to use very little description as it is. =p

http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...post272984

I thought it was pretty good Krillin, nice detail added....TWO THUMBS UP!.

http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...21391&sid=

Can someone C&C mine (the last one on the page from me)? I know it's not good at all (in my eyes) I was just wondering what others thought. Just keep in mind I'm sick and I couldn't conentrate, I just wanted to post to keep up. ...