09-24-2006, 07:53 PM
Well, It was smaller then what alot tend to post in saga, but thats not really bad, if you get my drift. I like how you switched between point of views, in a sense, going fdrom what the guys were thinking and then going to the way Burter would see things when the three men were assumed to be doing maintenence.
Maybe it could use a little more detail, in a sense if you wanted to make i longer, but other then that I dont much see a problem.
Maybe it could use a little more detail, in a sense if you wanted to make i longer, but other then that I dont much see a problem.
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Reb: ya know
Reb: I think you're a fucking moron OOC
Reb: but I have to hand it to you
Reb: you've become a really great writer