11-29-2006, 05:39 AM
Quote:Originally posted by BulmaSometimes people overdo that, too. It's wise to at least use the character's name the first time in the paragraph before you use a pronoun or adjective for 'em.
Also, do not over use names! Instead of using names all the times, try and replace them with adjectives to describe the character.
Nice advice, SB; I am completely unsure if I use adverbs or not.
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