If you wouldn't mind.

[Old Zangya]

Scattered across thousands of years of knowledge the shin obi struggled with his [B}thoughts, and conscious[/B] as he soared magnificently through the crystal blue air.

I think what you mean here is ?thoughts and consciousness?.

?outside the church; he showed none.

?outside the church, he showed none.? And dispersed is spelled wrong in your post: you spell it ?disbursed?. That?s all I really have time to read right now, maybe I?ll do more later.