01-20-2007, 07:07 PM
Quote:Image shifts to Toma, the narrator/inner voice speaking.
"He/I have/had no intention of fighting this non-transformer."
Image shifts to his eyes or face or something.
"...but I/he have/had no choice."
Why didn't you do that?
I don't want this fight! the young warrior thought but clenching his fist his eyes took on a steely gaze. "...but I have no choice."
You can break up thoughts and words so that it doesn't run together.
Usually I go with nouns for Yams like brute, pit fighter, and distinguishing characteristics to break it up like ebony eyed, veiny, overly muscular, hairless just find stuff that fits your character and other people are unlikely to use. 'The dark haired Saiya-Jin,' doesn't work because thats basically all of them.
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Dante's Abyss 2007 Runner-Up

