BJs Throne of Honesty

[Belle Hibiki]

I'd ask for opinions on my sign up, but I think I already know the reaction.

'Wtf?'

[Banned Dana]

Wouldn't mind getting a bit on my first Football post in the Park thread. Looking forward to starting some more action today.

[Kirano]

Originally posted by Olibu
*Sigh* It was worth a try, look at my spar with Kilah, thanks.

I could have sworn it was supposed to be a 3 -way. Ah never mind I have something planned.

Edit: Since I posted in this thread I might as well do the how was my hotel scene post? BJ.

[Toshiro]

Originally posted by Burter Jr
I liked it. Good development, good length. I like Gohan's teenager personality (in that he's always thinking about fucking girls). It's cool watching him deveop a crush, kinda like he's arguing with the little devil and angel on his shoulder.

Good roleplay

It's actully his darker side. I thank PoP:TTT for this idea of having the two voices in his head. Dark Prince and good Prince. But thanks man, it all helps in the long run.

[Burter Jr]

Closed till I finish those who asked

[Burter Jr]

Olibu:

Eh, it was okay. The huge paragraphs threw me off and I skimmed the fighting. Sorry.

Kid Buu:

I'm normally all for randomness, but that was just stupid. I didn't follow a damn thing that happened. I hope that's not how you usually write.

Nezi:

Good description, but that's pretty much all it was. Description.

13:

I liked it. Had enough description to give me a picture of the scene, enough character for me to know relate to 13's actions, and enough humor to amuse me.

The ending like, with Puukin, was gold

[Burter Jr]

Olibu, my bad

[Raditzu]

Do me, do me, do me!

[Burter Jr]

Which one?

[Raditzu]

Sign up. I only posted that second one cause you yelled at me.

='(

Meanie.

[Burter Jr]

I liked it. Excellent stuff. I was a little confused as to why Rad was in such a tired and bad mood at the start, but aside from that, it made me smile, usual.

I'm boycotting this thread until people give me feedback in RPG Discussion =(

[Yamu]

Post more and we'll have something to critique...

Edit: Just saw that you posted another...you couldn't have done that before I gave C&C?

[Burter Jr]

I did. Loser =o

[Spencinator]

I'd like some C&C about my post in the Park aswell. I know it's not really long, I try to make it long, but with spacing and stuff, it gets small. Though I do try to be clear with my writing.

[Jewtastic]

My last post. its in the Resturant. Tell me what you think...and be harsh.

[Old Captain Silver]

My post in the park.

Here

[Burter Jr]

Closed till I get to these

[Super Buu]

Edit: Shit, didn't see the closure. It's still there if you like, though.

If you like, you can C&C this post. It's the first decent one I've managed to get up for DA.

[Hellfighter 17]

Let's start over!

[Burter Jr]

It's still closed