CC - Burter vs Rad - Discussion Thread

[Alura]

Burter vs Raditzu

We'd love it if you guys read along and commented. This has been a long time coming.

[Kaden]

if i were less drunk ,i would prolly post right now.

needless to say, this should be pretty sup0er awesome.

[Alura]

How did you like mine? ='(

[Celena]

I guess Burter let out all his surpressed rage for Rad. Reminds me of vegeta's grudge against Goku. Vegeta being Burter and Rad being Goku.

IC I must say Burter's pretty envious of Rad. I liked the intro. You didn't really need to build up any tension Burter's going through, because it's been brewing for a very long time.

[Alura]

I don't think it's that Burter is jealous of Rad, I think Burter just wants Rad to recognize him as strong. Right now, Raditzu just knows Burter is capable, but outside that, he's just another warrior who isn't as good as Raditzu.

Burt just doesn't want to play second fiddle anymore.

[Kaden]

Hopefully I'll have a post up tonight. Got something started, but I'm not sure if I'll be able to finish it.

Loved the intro, though.

Was kind of caught off-guard. I didn't think this would start until much later.

[Alura]

Me too

[Sol]

Damn, pretty great first post. Set the stage very well and it didn't take the cheap way out either. The change in Burter's personality (at least to me) was so unexpected and uncharacteristic that it added an entire new dynamic to the situation. I liked that. You could have easily just had 'cool, calm, and collected' Burt put up his dukes and nobody would have ever faulted you, it would have ended up as a good read anyway, but taking the chance and flaring it up like that makes it a ton more memorable . Kudos.

This looks to have the potential to be the biggest thing since Super Buu v. Bardock. I'm excited

[Kaden]

Huzzah!

Two more each. Kinda exciting. If anyone wants to jump in with any comments, feel free to. I'm going to kind of be using this to showcase the side of Raditzu that doesn't really get to come out very often. I think he's looked on as a lot more one-dimensional than he actually is.

[Alura]

Posted.

You can really tell the difference in fighting style. I only write like, one minute worth of fighting and the rest is dialogue and internal dispute.

You write like a whole action scene with a little dialogue.

[Sage]

Could one of you please suck out loud with your next post?

It would make things a lot easier. Thanks, have a good day.

[Talys]

Could one of you please suck out loud with your next post?

It would make things a lot easier. Thanks, have a good day.

Don't do that. . .that's a bad idea. . .this rocks too hard to end like that.

[Kaden]

I'll have a post up tomorrow.

Couldn't get to it today. =(

[Kaden]

We're nearing the end. Only one left each.

Dun dun duuuuuuun.

Anyway, sorry about the length. I realized I had already overshot what I was aiming for and still wanted to shift settings. Oh well. Hope everyone is enjoying the fight.

[Alura]

It's alright. I'm excited to do this teleport fight segment, where they pretty much brawl over the entire universe and end up...you know where. =o

[Dave]

Wow, I love this fight. So much emotion in it, thats what makes it great. I also like how even though Burter is on his home planet, Reptilia, he doesn't seem to be effected by memories that he could have and chooses to keep fighting and not let anything get in his way of beating Rad. Great stuff, guys.

[Kaden]

Gah!

Went a bit longer than I meant to. It wouldn't have, but I wanted to end it in a good place for Bra to pick it up.

No matter how it turns out, this was genuinely the most fun I've had writing a fight scene in a looooooong. I didn't think there was anything to do in a fight that I hadn't done before. I'm very happy to be proven wrong.

In this case, anyway.

Any C&C you guys wanna lay on us would be epically appreciated.

[Sage]

I have decided a winner. I'll put up a conclusion tomorrow night.

It was close. Both of you have done some very cool character development, and taken your characters in new directions. That, alone, made things interesting for me.

The presentation of the fight was great, too.

[Alura]

Just being able to say I gave Raditzu a run for his money is an amazing accomplishment. When I first started in this RPG, I had all of the qualities of a newbie who was just getting into writing. Rad was still at a ridiculously high level of writing even back when I joined, four years ago.

So to able to say I went from being horribly outmatches and turning it into a toss-up made it all worth it. Not to mention the sheer growth Burter got to experience in this fight.

[Celena]

I want a match with you sometime Burter.