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[Mikhail]

So, it's been awhile since I was part of a roleplaying community and I feel the rust is starting to wear off.

I would be greatly appreciative if someone, anyone, could give me some C&C on my latest roleplay. It took me a total of forty-five minutes(Roughly).

Revolution Roleplay

[Vad]

Read this last night. I was completely blown away. You're descriptive detail as well as you're style to how Mikhail talk's to himself was simply amazing. Extremely enjoyable read. ^_^

[Mikhail]

I like to make the reader feel what said character is feeling. I find it too often when reading posts that I find myself disconnected from them. So I try my best to keep a human feel to my writing.

Thank you for the compliment Vad.

[Juno]

Mikhail is definitely an intriguing character. Looking forward to RP'ing with you further.

What exactly is Mikhail supposed to be like? I keep getting different vibes, and maybe that's what you're going for, so just a brief little explanation? =P

[Mikhail]

Well, currently i'm trying to play into the whole 'hybrid' thing. Mikhail, as a human is one of those types of people who prefer a philosophical approach where as his underlying saiyan heritage begs for the complete opposite. The older he gets the more his saiyan personality becomes more dominate.

In-short, he could be viewed as somewhat bi-polar.

That is exactly my aim. To make Mikhail unique. Atleast I try.

Edit; And he knows nothing of his saiyan lineage.

[Juno]

That's funny. That's kind of how Juno is. xD. Except he knows ALL about his Saiyan heritage.

We should really RP, sometimes.

[Mikhail]

We should. Although my character will be going through extreme changes. Once Mikhail learns of his heritage, well, lets just say it's the changing point in his life. Basically from lawful to chaotic.

[Juno]

Juno right now is being torn apart. I'm planning an extreme personal RP following the saga on Arlia that'll put him in his place. Either that or something on Vegeta.

[Mikhail]

We should do that together then. Two half-saiyans tearing ass across the universe, destroying stuff. Haha

[Juno]

Indeed. We'll talk.

[Mikhail]

Pm me about it.

How does this look? It's unrevised and probably the beginning of my roleplay where he changes.
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It would be painful, to say the least. Not a physical pain, no. The kind of mental pain you receive when some part of your life is irrevocably crushed. Shattered. Demolished. Such as, per se, ones heritage. That kind of affliction would be far more damaging than a physical blow. To know that your entire life had been a lie to everyone, especially yourself. The following emotional trauma would be devastating and entirely life altering. To discover that you weren't completely human. That you were, in fact, a hybrid. And oh, it gets worse, much worse. As if finding out you were only half human after twenty-two years of a blissful life wasn't hard enough, you have to realize that you're fifty percent something else. Another race entirely. And it would only add insult to injury to find out that the other half of your heritage, your bloodline, was of saiyan descent.



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The rain was a relentless tormentor. It cascaded from the heavens in tiny beads that looked harmless enough. People always exclaim about how wonderful the rain is. It's vast uses make it a number one resource that civilization couldn't live with out. One thing people don't tell you about the rain; it's cold. Unbelievably so. Somehow it just douses your moral and any hope you have left in the world. You can just feel it being washed away leaving you standing alone with no emotional defence, the pooling water starting to soak through your high-dollar boots that were suppose to be waterproof. Pfft.



The aquatic beads dripped from his once cropped hair. One in particular he watched drip right before his nose where it landed on the cold earth at his feet to add to the already standing water.