Rate the RP above you

[Mal Nova]

Oh well... Might as well get this started eh?

Rules are Simple...

1. You need to have signed up to DA to give feed back. If you like DA SO much.. JOIN!
2. You need to give feedback and a rating of 1-10, 1 being the Lowest and worst 10 being the Highest and best.
3. You must submit a reason for the score. Be a clean and honest critic.
4. There are some that just want to give opinions and not offer a post, that's fine. Just the person that gives up his link needs to give critic to the post before him.

These are in no way rules authorized by The staff runner, but, after seeing the out-of-control way some were before I thought I'd just make them =D

[DA 2009]

I approve these rules. *thumbs up*

[Kaden]

I always kill these things.

=(

[Mal Nova]

Let me finish reading the others and I will give my honest opinions of all you guys lol...

If you want to grade one Pick one and.... just do it lol

[Mal Nova]

I'm not able to give a post right now(Not allowed till our job is done), but i've got a few things to say as IM gonna be meeting you all...

Kaden: I will give you a 7/10. I would give you the top score but I know you will out do what you have within the next few Rp's.


Sophia: You had me at loss as I didn;t know your character... and I still dont... 3/10

Orion: im sorry but you had me at a loss as well... it was like you tried to hard... Your NPC made more sense and was funny then you...Also Didint Orion kill Retane in 08?

4/10 It would be worswt but i think i might be biased...

Xenia: Sorry I cant give you an unbiased opinion....If I had to I'd give you a 3 like the others...

I'm sorry but this is only for the welcome threads

[Tempo]

Jeez you guys better get your act together if you're gonna beat Mal.

[Mal Nova]

http://cdbzrpg.com/forum/showpost.php?p=...stcount=12

[Jesper]

Sure, I'll bite.

5/10.

Admittedly, it was better than I thought it would be. You seem to have a pretty solid hold on the kind of character you want to go for, so that's good. The problem was that the entire post is fraught with grammatical errors (for instance, there's a run-on in your first paragraph) and typos ("girll"). I'm sure you can spell and that you know grammar, but I don't think you focus on it quite as much as you should. That goes for roleplaying and generally just chatting it up elsewhere.

Other than that, not much to say since it's basically just an intro for your character. I kind of chuckled that it only took "tournament" for Nova to sign up, but again, that's the kind of character you have. Pretty fitting, if you ask me.

HERE BE MINE: http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post521068

[Orion]

8/10

I quite liked, at least for me who doesn't know too much about Sophia, how you quickly summarised what happened to your character thus far. The quick mention of the volcano was something I wasn't aware of, and that helped me centre my understanding of Sophia in the circumstances that much better.

Much like the others who are constantly assumed to make the top five, you've got great flow to your writing and your vocabulary is top notch. I mostly enjoyed the interplay between Sophia and Kaden. I think you write Kaden very well and very true to his character.

Not much bad to say, really. It's an opening post so it's hard to make them super exciting, but yours was engaging. I originally looked at the length and thought I'd get bored, but I didn't even notice the length in the end. There was one spot where you used the present tense instead of past, but that's nit picking a bit too much.

How cool is Orion? You decide: http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post521081

[Alexander Trafford]

8/10

One of the best RPs that i've read for this competition thus far. I loved the description in the memory. I enjoyed how you kept things vague, yet hinted at enough so the reader has some idea as to what is going on - even if Orion may not have. The section of your RP that takes place in the present was very good, especially for a first RP when no one really knows what is going on yet, and we're all just looking for RP fodder. I like how you tied in the pregame events, and gave the reader a taste of Orion's personality and his mentality by showing how he wanted to be here, and how he planned on being the hunter, not the hunted. The butcher shop and the intersection description was a nice touch, giving some description and some reality to your surroundings so that the city felt like an actual city and not just some cardboard cut out for the characters to play around in.

Not too much criticism i can give for this RP. It wasn't the most creative, but it was a well-written, almost conservative introduction piece that let the readers get a taste of Orion's past, as well as his present personality. Well done.

http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showpost.ph...ostcount=4

[Mal Nova]

7/10

It's not Mino, I'll give you that. But it's almost a whole new style from it. You gave a small, yet slightly detailed reason of his thoughts of being here. It was descriptive, and nicely done as well.

Criticism: Well all you did was drink a bit of liquor and smoke. No action. It was bland, I guess, but still very well written.


Kill me: http://cdbzrpg.com/forum/showpost.php?p=...ostcount=7