Moves for my charachter Yamu

[Yamu]

Ki shotgun - A ki attack that sends hundreds of little ki blast in all directions. Best if used up close to ensure the attack connects with the opponent.

Eraser Cannon- A large blast shot out of the user's mouth.

Kikou Ha- An energy wave that can dispell most KI attacks

[Jonathan Meer]

I recommend that you flesh out the descriptions a bit. Perhaps tell us what the attack looks like physically, the size of the attack, the drain on the user, etc.

I have no idea what Kikou Ha is, and from your description, I'm not too much more informed than I was five minutes ago. Is it a shield? Does it coat the user? Is it a simple nullification blast?

[Yamu]

I'm sorry, you will have to forgive some of my 'newbie' mistakes. Let me flesh them out a little more.

Ki Shotgun- Activated by extending the forefinger and thumb of the left hand holding the left hand with the right and saying ?Shotgun?. Launches hundreds of bright blue ki balls from the left forefinger, all at one time, that extend in all directions. A devastating attack when done at close range and all the ki balls attack at one time.

Eraser Cannon- Ki is charged in the mouth and unleashed in a large flame-like ki blast that extends outward in a narrow cone. Use full when hands are out of commission or when needed to pour a lot of pain in a constant stretch.

Kikou Ha- Created by reaching both hands back as far as possible and clapping them together in front of your body. This sends a ki-distortion wave that weakens, destroys, or disrupts any ki attacks directly in front of the user. Dangerous to use because it uses a lot of ones own ki, but when someone put a lot of effort into their own attack this can be devastating.

I appreciate the critique?anything else do you think I need to add?

[Jonathan Meer]

Looks pretty good to me. Not a problem with the "newbie mistakes", as I don't think I've even submitted my moves yet.

Don't worry about it, you'll slide right in.

EDIT:

Use full when hands are out of commission or when needed to pour a lot of pain in a constant stretch.

That sentence seems a bit off.

[Hellfighter 17]

It's really up to staff, but I think that means that if you cannot use your arms, it can be a good attack as most ki attacks involve the arms/hands and since it is flame-like I am guessing it induces little amounts of pain for a certain amount of time.

[Yamu]

I think the sentence SHOULD have read:

Usefull when your hands are our of commission or you want to keep the pain on your opponent for an extended period of time.

And yes, Hell Fighter you are completely right.

Sometimes i find 'Grammer' gets in the way of good writing...

[Alura]

Approved.

[Yamu]

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