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Your roleplay sample could use more description. All we can see is dialogue pretty much. And instead of using slang for words like 1 for one, it is best to type them out. Like you put every1 but it doesn't look good unless you put everyone. Use spell check when you are done, too.
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A lot better than the first one. But you need to write out words. Instead of u, use you. And things like that.
But in all, it needs some work, it's a little rough around the edges, just smooth it out now.
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I'll let Tapion finish this, but yeah, "thanks" is fine. Its this he was referring to: "?Nice fight u had there Kirano how?s about I take u under my wing? Try not to use "aol speak" or anything like that while IC (In Character). OOC its ok, just annoying. Also watch capitals. If you can, run it through Word.
"I'm gonna
fuck that unicorrrrrn"
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Sorry, I've been busy. Please be patient as this is what the RPG is slightly based on. Staff have lives they have to attend to but for the RPG, I believe you are fine. You should be ok to register and somebody will activate you.
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Your training pass is qwerty
Please post three starting moves here, unless you want to keep the ones the character already has
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