Joining

[Old Dave]

Sure go ahead and post it.

[Old Dave]

Sorry man chill out, we all have jobs and the like. Were not all 16 year old kids that can sit at the computer all day. I'll read all your stuff tonight and get back to you.

[Android-18]

Quality is greater than quanitity.

Now, I understand you are not English, but I think a few things could be done before we let you in.

Do you have Microsoft Word? It's a program that allows you to write text documents in it, and it will help you correctly spell words and fix your grammer. I HIGHLY suggest you get this program, it will help you spell and improve your writing.

The other problem is that your paragraphs are way too big. One paragraph is 3-5 sentences. Try to keep them short. If a new character is speaking, he or she gets a new paragraph. Don't make huge blocks of text, every new thought or action deserves a new paragraph.

Now, we do not allow more than one Trunks. So, look here: http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/?roster=1&o...&active=No

That is a list of who you could be, as long as they do NOT have (NPC) or (Retired).

[Old Dave]

Paragraphs are normally 5-7 sentences..but here I see alot of people doing 4-5..so after every 4-5 sentences hit enter and start a new paragraph to break up your writing and to space it out so it is not all clumped together.

Do that, post it again, and choose another character and we'll go from there.

[Old Dave]

Everything there that does not have (NPC) beside it is up for grabs, unless you can think of a DB,DBZ,DBGT character not on the list that is not taken.

And no you can not be chibi trunks.

I'll read over your roleplay tonight when I get some free time.

[Old Dave]

No you don't understand..Burter Jr. is a custom character who not many people get and have to have been here awhile to get. Please just choose a name from the list we have.

[Old Dave]

Ok I was reading over your application, but since you want to keep posting and being impatient I'll let someone else handle this. But in my opinion I feel that your style of writing is not yet suitable to be accepted into chubbs. But I'll let someone else decide.

[Raditzu]

Sorry, but you're not accepted.

[Burter Jr]

I plan on giving Burter up one day, to someone with lots of talent. That's not you.

Oh, and I love you, Rad.

[Burter Jr]

Yes. A couple months should be ample time to improve yourself

[Hellfighter 17]

You can post it. We won't stop you from that. It's just suggested you really take some time and get better on your own for a bit.

[Old Dave]

I'm sorry man, I still stand by what Burter Jr said and what Raditzu said, right now is just not the time for you buddy, maybe when you get a better understanding of the English language and the way we structure our writing you'll have a better chance. I'm sorry to decline your application once again.

[Reijin]

We do definately appreciate the interest though, and hope to see you again in the future so that we may better assist you in honing your writing.

[Old Dave]

Well like we said we are not going to stop you from trying to learn and showing us what you have learned. All we ask is that you learn some more, practice it on your own and come back in a month or two. Give yourself time to learn and absorb it all then apply it. Do this and come back in a few months and show us some improvement and we will go from there.

[Reijin]

One suggestion... If we reject one application saying that the roleplay isn't good enough, and then ask you to practice and try again in the future, we don't recommend reposting the same exact roleplay you were rejected on in the first place. An unnacceptable roleplay is going to be an unnacceptable roleplay even two years later. It doesn't suddenly glow in the dark and attract a shine then.