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[Android-18]

Well that RP sample isn't quite up to our standards. Try using Microsoft words, also, quotations don't need spaces between them. Make a new paragraph for each new person speaking, so:

Turles stared at the creature waiting for an answer.

"I can help you..." said the frightened green child.

'Ha, I knew it, I knew this puny thing could not stand my true powers.' thought Turles.

"I've seen some new humans enter the planet." said the creature.

"Well then what are we waiting for!?" screamed the determined sayan.

"Follow me." said the creature.

[Android-18]

Write a new sample, because I know you copied the part I revised for you. You REALLY should stop putting spaces between quotations. Write a fight or something, and again, if you have Microsoft Word I strongly suggest you write in it.

[Burter Jr]

I apologize, but I don't think your up to standards with what we expect from our members. Please look at some of the posts we do in the in character boards, or perhaps find someone to give you some personal tutoring on writing.

[Burter Jr]

Sorry about that. It's a lot better, but still lacks a lot of skills we require. I suggest going to the RP School and we'll help you out there.

RP School