Outcasts C&C

[Super Buu]

If you want something C&C'ed, post here. Generally I'll just do the 'whoever posted above' thing, but if I can I'll give everyone some comments.

How bout: [O] Super Buu visits Memory Village ?

[Belle Hibiki]

I thought that was pretty good. You showed a conflict/doubt in Super Buu over him taking a huge responsibility, and I really look forward to reading more. You broke up the paragraphs a bunch, which is thank God, because big blocks - like Burter said - can be tiring. More dialogue keeps the action popping along in your's and others' posts.

That said, I thought your post with Koola was better, but it's understandable that that would be far more gripping than just meeting with the townspeople, given the risk of imminent violence.

Trying to get into a good groove: Campfire Kid Buu

I tried to roleplay 17 a bit since... yeah... Just having one person sitting around in DA not talking at all can be hazardous to your health.

[Warako]

I like it Supes, personally it's hard for me to give proper C&C when I myself have trouble writing at the levels of people on this team, but I enjoyed the read and I'm sure Burter would aswell.

Eh if you guys want to do C&C for me, it's right here. Chew my ass out over it if you want, I'd prefer it.


PS: I didn't forget about you Kid Buu, I'll read yours tonight and probably give good feedback as always.

[Belle Hibiki]

Thanks CJ!

Let's bug Burter to get his opinions in on this as well. A lot of people in this alliance seem to like my stuff, but I don't think I've ever got input from anyone else. Much less an op running a saga.

[Belle Hibiki]

Kid Buu being a bastard, as usual. Hastily done.

[Warako]

I enjoyed your last RP, I can't really point out any bad errors, not because I'm being nice, but I don't really see any that catch my attention.

I like the description of Buu's feelings of the killers and how they seemed to have affected him, in terms of contemplation of what if this and what if that etc.


EDIT: I said I'd C&C but forgot, your last post reminded me of the promise I made you.