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After reading all three I ask that you submit another three created by you, those seem like they were copy and pasted from someplace else. If that's not the case then like MB said I don't understand why there are saiyan references in two of them.
And yes the first one is too strong.
Three more please.
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I don't see the copying problem you guys have, besides if people want to base their moves off of somebody else's that's their deal. Plus, I can tell that he wrote at leats a majority of it (if not all). The last two are fine, but the first one, for any level, it should be drain ki, and even moreso for each level. Just fix that one up and I don't see a problem.
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Quote:Bombs of Apocalypse - Bujin extends an open palm, in his palm a small spherical orb fo blue Ki is formed. The siayan does likewise with other hand. The Saiyan warrior then throws the Ki balls to the ground, then begins to rapidly fire the blasts, so much so that the rapis succession of Ki balls looks almost to be one continuous attack. Bujin fires the bombs every which way. Once the Pirate is done, the ground is litered with the small blue orbs. When ever Bujin decides to call these bonbs into play, he extends an open hand, and as a small sphere of blue ki begins to form, The small pirate closes his hand tightly allowing the energy to seep through his fingers. The light emmited from this action is what triggers the bombs to go off.
*Note the bombs are solid, and hard, think earth dragon ball sized...may grow larger as Bujin's power grows. Also they cannot be set off, even by a strong Ki blast, only if they are exposed to the Trigger that so far only Bujin knows.The reason noone else can trigger the bombs is that Bujin has mastered the exact color and intensity to trigger the beams. It would be difficult for anyone else to learn this attack simply by seeing it.*
Is what they are talking about i believe.
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Yea, I noticed that, but I didn't see that as reasonable cause.
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Also, I don't know if your first move will be acceptable. Ever since Pyrokinesis was introduced to the RPG, fire-based attacks have been restricted to people with that technique.
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Yeah sure they are good to go, redo the first one.
And the reason I had said no to all three of them is because I myself thought that you had taken it from some place, the whole thing is your supposed to make them up yourself and write your own desc for them.
But seeing as you did and are taking them from a previous rpg you were on I see no problem, just reword some of each so that we can put them in your tech vault.
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Isn't the second one a bit similar to Body Split?
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