the sum of longing

[Vegeta]

this has been stuck inside my head for weeks. i just hoped that it would escape. i suppose it finally did.

---

stars that blaze so brightly through your hair, a sparkle from the saturday sun. we twist between bedsheets, our love flows in rivers towards the earth. the sweet scent rising from every corner. my ghost rises in a stove's burner. you quietly cover the flame, soup for a sick lover.

the words were plain the subject overused, but every heart does beat and every writer dies a romantic. a backwards step into a book, the story where no one is ever wronged. this pictures that hide words.

words whispered by a glass, that fragile sense of touch. one more memory you'd rather forget. forgotten toys and torn pages in this journal. words never meant to be found. the callous ink dries quick, unforgiving. so unwilling to change, not unlike I. my delicate skin cracks in anticipation of your breath. the words i knew you could speak. "i've never loved you as i do in this moment, this careful collection of gazes, the sum of longing." my lungs breathed easy.

the words i spoke that day, burned into my tongue. "you could never take away my love of you. no selfish act will ever carve into my teeth." your hand snakes into mine. every move calculated with such reckless precision. such beautiful abandon.

you reach for your camera and spin the lens through all that we may become. color circles around your eye, searching for that perfect shot. our perfect life. your eye seeks to capture those simple vicissitudes in leaving.

kiss me once more and promise it will not be the last. "and i always keep a promise."

[Kazuya]

That is awesome, man. =) your poetry style is similar to mine, as far as structure, but yours conveys a brighter image that has a bit of somberence to it. brava!

[Vegeta]

i've never seen yours.

but i like to think that i'm unique. let me think that i'm unique for just a tiny bit longer.

[Kazuya]

no, what I was saying though, the structure, as far as not caring about rhyming, just pouring out what you want to convey exactly what one means. you are unique.

[Kami]

Originally posted by Waffuru
i've never seen yours.

but i like to think that i'm unique. let me think that i'm unique for just a tiny bit longer.

i think hers looks nothing like yours - nice


but neither one of you are the first the write without rhyming =/

[Kazuya]

Oh, I will have some of mine up here soon enough. It'll be a minute, so don't hold your breaths. I want to get my sk training done first before I whip out the poetic arsenal.

[Hellfighter 17]

It's rather different from most of your others, where the two obviously separate, but the last paragraph can either be interpreted as that they do make it, or the promise is broken--basically foreshadowing. I interpret it as the latter, since it follows the scheme of your others more closely. My favourite line was "the callous ink dries quick, unforgiving." Really made me think about how pofound words can be.