Need True Criticism

[The Not Cool Not Tapion]

This is me taking one for the team and allowing you guys into a sensitive part of my life. I love music and am trying to sing and whatnot and I have a song I wrote and recorded but not complete and there are two version. I want you all to listen to the two version of Wish You and then tell me brutally honest what's wrong and how to change it. Guitar is kind of rough because I wasn't really playing, just trying to get it down...

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusi...dID=653342

[Bojack]

The guitar was fine. Your voice wasn't horrific, it just sounded like you were trying too hard. Maybe change your style... pick a singer and try to imitate. Maybe record yourself just talking and I'll introduce you to some good singers you might be able to pull off?

PS: tab that shit. You can't make a song and not tab it, it's not fair. ='(

[Toshiro]

yeah, just get your voice in to a better level. it sounds too deep for the type of song your aiming for. try going for a softer tempo on the vocal's.

[Piccolo Daimoun]

By themselves, the guitar is good and your voice is fine. But it just doesn't seem to quite match up together.

Perhaps try to ease into every line? Instead of just hammering onto it, sound a bit lighter and try to increase volume.

Also, you should soften your voice a bit. Incidentally, try and keep your pitch level throughout.

I think it's pretty cool that you can play and sing at the same time, though. I always get impressed by that.

[Blind Man]

Yeah I find it impossible to play and sing simultaneously.

Like PD said, soften your voice a bit. Also, some singers tend to um...I can't think of the word, but they say "aaaah" instead of what would be an "arrrr", you know what I mean? You seem to be doing that, and it sounds like your voice would better fit a true "arrr" instead of the "aaahhh", so try enunciating the word when you sing. Softly.

Once you get it to work I'm gonna want the EP =P

[The Not Cool Not Tapion]

Thanks all, I will make a tab just for you.

[The Not Cool Not Tapion]

E| 3 2 3
B| 3 3 3
G| 0 2 2
D| 2 0 0
A| 2
E| 0
strum, strum few times, Strum

E| 1 3 0 3
B| 1 1 1 1
G| 2 2 0 0
D| 3 3 2 2
A| 3 3
E|
strum, few times then, then, strum few times then



Find rhythm yourself. Same chord over and voer. At the part where it pauses, it just plays one chord, pause, then strum it before going to new chord, pause, strum, and so on.


Easy

I'm incorporating a solo into this now, actually.


Edit: Spacing of the tab is off but basically, you can figure it out.

[Bojack]

Originally posted by The Cool Tapion
I'm incorporating a solo into this now, actually.

I asked you the other day do you know any scales, and you said you only knew one.

[The Not Cool Not Tapion]

Originally posted by Bido

Originally posted by The Cool Tapion
I'm incorporating a solo into this now, actually.

I asked you the other day do you know any scales, and you said you only knew one.

Yes

But, although I don't technically know scales, I know key and know what notes to hit to stay in key and sound good. I know where on the fret board to hit for a certain chord, but I don't know scales or anything.

[The Not Cool Not Tapion]

New vocals, need crit again.
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=653342

[Tobias]

I think you are trying to go too high. If you can hit that 'sweet spot' in your voice you'd probably be pretty good.

[The Not Cool Not Tapion]

To keep up to date on my guitar playing, I now have an acoustic band with my friend singing.

Myspace.com/j3rc


Keep tuned ^_^