Style input (C & C)

[Aqua]

Ok, so I have RPed DBZ for around 10 years or so now. (Starting out on ezboard and moving to creating my own board which I still currently admin). However, in all of the boards I have RPed, I have never been allowed to Rp another person's character. Generally, i have always stuck with the rule of only writing what my character thinks and intends to do. Never saying if an attack hits a PC, and leaving all things that pertain to the PC's reation to the owner of that PC. My question is, how well do you guys think I handled the change in style? I know the best idea is to view character vaults and previous Rp threads to better know the other PCs in my thread, and I did that. But I was wondering if my particular style of philosophical inward focused insight fit in ok. AND, I have a tendency to back track a bit in the storyline, as in, I will summarize what my character was thinking from my last post througout everyone else's posts... does that work ok in the Chubbs RPing system?

C & C desired folks... be gentle ...

http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/threa...age=1&sid=

[Chase]

http://cdbzrpg.dracondev.com/forum/board...id=72&sid=

[Aqua]

Oh god damn it! I got caught up in my spar with Celipa and posted this in the wrong f'n board. Will the newbness never cease?

Will a staffer please move this over to the right location please?

[Aqua]

*double post* - sry

Does no one have any advise?

[Sullivan]

Alright, as the one that sparred you, I can tell you some stuff about your writing.

The writing itself is compelling. You manage to keep it interesting, realistic, and clever. My only complaint - you tend to write in huge chunks. That turns people away. Break up your stuff into smaller paragraphs, and it'll do wonders. Trust me.

=)

[Aqua]

Thanks a ton Celipa! I'll look into that in the future.

Any other thoughts?