Gokon

[Gokhan]

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Name:Gokon

Age:7

Race: saiyan

Sex:Male

Starting Planet:Earth

Profession: in school

Fighting Style: courageous,

Short Bio: Gokon was born with amesnia but overcame it at age 4 he still cannot explain anything that had happened before he overcame so he is on a quest for the dragonballs to fix that

General Description: he has a tail has kid gohan (sayian,android) face goku's hair and wears goku's kid gi he had that stuff passed down somehow he was able to be unaffected by aging when he was shot away from planet vegeta he has a red headband

Starting Abilities: Kamehameha, masenko

Trait: Tenacious

Stats: Inner Strengh as an Ability, which gives you an extra 15%)

Strength - 35%
Focus - 15%
Endurance -25 %
Agility - 25%


Role-play Sample:Gokon was flying to school on the flying nimbus passed down to him he was scared ms.mccaig was going to kill him for being late and then he heard the bell ring at that point gokon powered up and rushed to class Ms.mccaig had been teaching multiplication when gokon rushed in he was wearing the regular green pants and white shirt with suspenders he rushed to the his seat but was grabbed by ms.mccaig tail first and was given an assignment to write i will not be late x1000 since he has been late many times

[Victoria]

Hi there, Gokon.

There's a few problems with your application. If you haven't read our joining information thread, you should do that now. Here is the link: Joining Rules.

First of all, your description of your character. Instead of saying "goku's hair, tail like gohan" actually describe your character.

"He has a tail, which normally resides wrapped around his waist. Gokon's hair is long, and pointed upward in a jagged jet black style. There is also a red bandanna wrapped around his brow, keeping stray hair out of his eyes."

Picture the character in your mind, and describe him for us.

Your starting abilities should be TWO abilities from our list here. So things like Healing, or Dark Ki. Stuff like "Kamehameha" would be custom techniques which you can apply for and purchase once you're approved.

Your RP sample is something that will need to be worked on. We require 300 words, and that sample you gave us was substantially smaller than our required amount.

The major issue is that your sample was one big run-on sentence. I HIGHLY suggest using Microsoft Word, and brushing up on your grammar/writing before you resubmit. We aren't too strict here, but we have some standards. Right now you have to put in some work on your writing.

At this time we will have to reject your application. Feel free to try again once you've worked on the problems I've outlined .

Have a great day.