08-10-2006, 03:22 PM
Thank you for your patience and abiding by our three day rule.
You've got potential, but the sample rp could be better. Try to add a little more description of the area, or what the characters are thinking, etc. A little bit of grammar editing wouldn't go astray, either.
Please feel free to try again.
You've got potential, but the sample rp could be better. Try to add a little more description of the area, or what the characters are thinking, etc. A little bit of grammar editing wouldn't go astray, either.
Please feel free to try again.


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