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[Ruhiel]

Well, everything else checks out, however, your RP example has a whole bunch of grammatical errors in it. For example:

Maraikoh a legendary fighter among the dinosaurs.

That's not quite a complete sentence. You need a verb in there to make it complete. Revised sentence:

Maraikoh was a legendary fighter among the dinosaurs.

People may be able to figure out what you're talking about in this sentence, but later ones I couldn't even understand. Like this one:

He never came back, neither came the sorcerer.

You're lacking a whole lot of stuff here. I understand that Maraikoh never came back, but what's going on with the sorceror? Don't forget your conjunctions, they're vital to separating different aspects of a sentence. Also, the ordering of your words makes that extremely akward and very hard to comprehend. I don't fully understand what you were trying to say there, but here's a possible revision from what I've drawn from it:

He never came back, and neither did the sorceror.

It's still a pretty weak sentence, but it's understandable now.

Basically, all of your errors were grammatical. Incorrect verb usage, missing preposistions, sentence fragments, just a bunch of stuff.

Basically, all I need you to do is try again and I'd recommend using Microsoft Word's Spell Check feature if you have it. It can catch most grammatical errors. Once you've rewritten your rp example, or written a new one, let me see it and I'll give you a "thumbs up" or "thumbs down." Sorry for having to tell you no, but it's still not quite there. If you have any questions, just ask.