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Did I do good? - Janemba - 12-31-2007
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?p=444868#post444868
First RP I've done in a while, since I got lazy. Hopefully I'll drop my lethargicness and get to regularly writing again. If anyone has the time, could they read that post over and tell me what I did wrong and what I did right? I'd be ever-so-grateful.
Did I do good? - Abel - 01-03-2008
I read a large chunk of this. You have a large vocabulary and that's evident, but at times it seemed that you were trying to show that off...in a sense of course. It's hard for me to explain. You use the words correctly and it's already, it's just a lot of large words and it's just like "what?".
Maybe I'm just not used to reading something like that. Maybe I just don't know how you write. It made what I read intense due to description and just entertaining.
So you are getting back into it. Go for it. Have fun while doing it and keep writing.
Did I do good? - Janemba - 01-04-2008
Yeah, it kinda felt like I was going overboard with the long words when I was writing it. I tried to up the vocab a bit since it seemed like my writing was sounding like "The brown dog jumped over the black cat."
Thank ya' for the read. 'Tis much appreciated.