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How did I do? - Mirhuell - 12-31-2007
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread.php?t=23148
I'd appreciate it if anyone could read the above, comment, and give me some tips. Thank you in advance.
How did I do? - Abel - 01-03-2008
I skimmed it but what I read (about five paragraphs, I'm feeling lazy), you are a pretty decent writer. When I say that, that's pretty good.
A couple problems, though. You like your commas WAY too much and use them when they aren't necessary. You also have the largest run-on sentence in the third paragraph. So just work on comma use and using periods if you need, or learning to use semicolons.
Other than that, keep at it.