Any thoughts on my first rp?

[Old Dende]

Just wanted to see if anyone had any thoughts on my first few parts of my rp, and if anyone would be willing to give any helpful pointers.

[Shun]

Thoughts of the Past

You should give a link. I'll C-N-C later.

[Old Dende]

Ok, here is the link... Thoughts of the Past.

[Downy Peach]

I don't like the dashes, you'd think it would help with reading it, but it doesn't. There's really no need for a double paragraph in there either, just the one will suffice. I think you're also using the elipses too often.

Sorry I can't assist with much more then that, but it's enough to ease the eyes a little when reading it. Though that's personal preference on whether or not you would want to keep those in. I read the rest and as far as content goes, it's good