07-01-2010, 04:43 AM
Hi Karachi, thanks for the joining application.
There are a few things I'll need you to fix up before we can accept you.
The two starting abilities you listed are not from the list. Pick two from this list.
Your trait is also multiple choice. From this list here, pick a trait that is suitable for your character.
The sample roleplay is three hundred words, not characters.
We don't allow characters to be biologically linked to any canons, so where you've said that he might be part of the Vegeta-sei bloodline, it will have to only be rumour.
Last but not least, we generally write in the format of past tense. It's only a small thing. For instance, in your first paragraph "Karachi glances around on his this new strange world," it would read "Karachi glanced around on this new strange world."
Fix those little things up and I'll be happy to welcome you to Chubbs.
There are a few things I'll need you to fix up before we can accept you.
The two starting abilities you listed are not from the list. Pick two from this list.
Your trait is also multiple choice. From this list here, pick a trait that is suitable for your character.
The sample roleplay is three hundred words, not characters.
We don't allow characters to be biologically linked to any canons, so where you've said that he might be part of the Vegeta-sei bloodline, it will have to only be rumour.
Last but not least, we generally write in the format of past tense. It's only a small thing. For instance, in your first paragraph "Karachi glances around on his this new strange world," it would read "Karachi glanced around on this new strange world."
Fix those little things up and I'll be happy to welcome you to Chubbs.
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