12-31-2007, 06:42 AM
http://www.cdbzrpg.com/forum/showthread....post444868
First RP I've done in a while, since I got lazy. Hopefully I'll drop my lethargicness and get to regularly writing again. If anyone has the time, could they read that post over and tell me what I did wrong and what I did right? I'd be ever-so-grateful.
First RP I've done in a while, since I got lazy. Hopefully I'll drop my lethargicness and get to regularly writing again. If anyone has the time, could they read that post over and tell me what I did wrong and what I did right? I'd be ever-so-grateful.
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[COLOR="Black"]I wanna see your face, painted black.
Black as night, black as coal.
I wanna see the sun blotted out from the sky;
I wanna see it painted, painted, painted, painted black.[/COLOR]