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[Hellfighter 17]

Yea. We also need three starting moves from yo, though, and a better RP sample. Your sentences are way too bland; "He finally found what he was looking for." This could be spiced up using adjectives to describe schtuff and describing how he was at this moment. Also, you can describe the setting, and so forth. I'[m not saying every sentence should be uber long, but they should be better than that. I hoep it doesn't sound liek I'm ragging on you, I'm merely trying to help yea. Here is an example of a beautiful RP, and I suggest reading it; you could pick up soem things from it. I'm not saying I expect you to be able to do something like that, but look to it for help/inspiration.