Joining

[Krillin]

It's obvious you have talent, but you need to realize that we write in the past tense here. Instead of:

"As the sun rises in the morning sky, Bardock is seen walking down a little dirt path in the middle of the woods,"

We would write it as this:

"As the sun rose in the morning sky, Bardock walked down a little dirt path in the middle of the woods,"

Sorta like book style. If you could just pop up a short little paragraph showing that you've got this covered, we'll patch you through.