=\ Please? With sprinkles on top?

[Violet]

Well, I guess that request was a little scary...


But anways, if I can please get some comments on this, I will really appreciate it. I could use a boost of confidence to know I am going in the right direction with my writing. I really could use it. Other than the request above, it is my first real attempt at humor, and Panbuukin let me do his first Oozaru transformation for him. I just used the information he gave me on his character's behaviors and applied it. I hope someone can at least take a look at it. I don't expect a great detailed synopses, just a few thoughts or something.


Thanks!